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hikapikashoon) wrote2010-02-03 07:13 pm
Hana Kimi: Chapter 8
Okay, so three things.
1. I made a mistake in Hana Kimi. As I was looking back, there was this one scene where Nami went to the sleeping Hikaru in the nurse's office and said, "I'll always see you as my sister." Well, isn't Nami already Hikaru's sister? I wanted that scene, but Nami was the only one who is eligible for being Hikaru's OC, thus she's the sister. But then, the second Hikaru OC never commented, so I didn't really put here back into the story. Just wanted to point that out, so remind me if I don't make Nami the sister, and I'll change the story.
2. Since I have more than 10 OCs, I've decided to structure the story this way: get Hikaru and Sayuri together, then make each of the OC pairs together one by one (or not, for some couples, since there are two people for some boys), then let them come up with ideas of how to get Sayuri to do gymnastics again, like what Hikaru wanted. Thus, it's gonna be quite long, sorry for making this boring story a long one, and thanks for supporting me.
3. Since I haven't thought of any ideas on how to write the getting-lamer-story NEWBIE, I've decided to only update Hana Kimi this time. Hopefully I don't bore you guys too much >.<
Chapter 8:
Hikaru opened his eyes. Before realizing where he was, his instinct made him sit up and look around. The nurse’s face blurrily came into view “Oh, you’re finally conscious now!” and smiled. Indeed, Hikaru had been unconscious for 48 hours.
The door burst open and Chinen came in with Aya grabbing onto his arm, afraid that she’ll lose Chinen if she doesn’t. Mai came in with a cheerful Nami, who was desperate to check on her brother’s wellbeing.
“Oniichan daijoubu?” Nami asked the nurse.
The nurse smiled down at Nami, “Un, daijoubu yo”
“Oniichan!” Nami exclaimed and jumped onto the bed dto snuggle up with Hikaru. Hikaru moved over to make room. Knowing that Hikaru is trapped on the bed, Aya tried to make another harmful move on him, forgetting that her beloved Chinen is present.
“Aya?” Chinen held firmly onto Aya’s hand, “Daijoubu”
Aya looked at Chinen, and nodded.
“Jyaa, let’s go outside ne” Chinen smiled, and the happy couple smiled at each other.
As soon as the door closed, Mai looked guiltily at Hikaru, sorry for all the things that Aya had been pulling on him. “GOMEN NASAI” Mai bowed down to Hikaru for Aya’s jealousy.
“Eh? Nani ga?”
“Aya……Aya…….” Mai started to cry.
Confined to the bed, Hikaru whispered something to Nami and she ran out. Meanwhile, he kept asking Mai if she’s okay.
A minute later, Chinen alone, comes in. He saw the crying Mai, walked over and placed a hand oon her shoulder, “Daijoubu?” Mai raised her head up to a smiling Chinen, causing her to cry even harder.
Just passing by, Rina and Ayana came in to comfort their friend. Thinking that Hikaru was the reason why Mai cried, Ayana glared at Hikaru.
“Daijoubu, Mai-chan? They both asked.
Hikaru answered, “She’s-“ Ayana glared at him again, making him stop talking and think Yabai, I should get Sayuri to start gymnastics soon so I can leave”
Thinking that everyone’s paying attention to Mai, Hikaru decided to go somewhere else. When he made it out the door, he bumped into none other than Iwata Sayuri. Hikaru dropped his crutches, dropping it on Sayuri’s leg. Instead of complaining of pain, Sayuri gritted her teeth and gasped in alarm, “GOMEN NASAI, HIKARU! DAIJOUBU?”
“Daijoubu desu, demo… Sayuri-chan wa?” Hikaru said quietly
“ZENZEN DAIJOUBU DESU”
Hearing Sayuri’s loud voice, the seven members of JUMP (Yabu, Takaki, Inoo, Daiki, Yamada, Ytuo and Ryutaro) who were nearby came. Chinen, alarmed by “HIKARU” came running out of the nurse’s room, wondering what had happened. Seeing Sayuri and Hikaru on the ground together, Chinen motioned JUMP to leave, leaving the two alone.
“SUMIMASEN DESHITA!” the two bowed to each other, then lifted their heads and laughed.
<In the room>
“Ne, daijoubu?”
“Un, you?”
“Daijoubu dayo!”
“Ne, you asked earlier. Why I didn’t continue gymnastics.” Sayuri looked at Hikaru, who was staring back at her. He tried to move off of his bed so he could carefully listen to her. Sayuri stopped him. “Yamete, I’ll speak louder or whatever you want. Just rest, onegai”
“Can you come to me then? I want to see your face when you’re talking.”
Sayuri walked up to Hikaru’s bed and sat there, “Is this close enough for you?”
Hikaru smiled shyly, “Motto ii desu ka?”
Sayuri sat closer to Hikaru, making both people’s hearts pound. “Like this?”
“Perfect. Anou, what is it you want to tell me?”
“About gymnastics, I’ve been doing it all my life, I don’t want to do it anymore, it’s boring.”
“Ne, onegai. Please continue it again”
“Sore dake”
“Anou, Sayuri-san, do you consider me as a friend?”
“H-hai, I’m beginning to” Sayuri smiled a friendly smile.
“Then, boku no tame ni, please consider doing gymnastics again”
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Hikaru smiled shyly, “Motto ii desu ka?”
Sayuri sat closer to Hikaru, making both people’s hearts pound. “Like this?”
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Aww <3
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